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Layout
The layout does not fit in any of the standard resolutions of 800x600 or 1024x786. Perhaps you should note that in your main page or even in a splash page beforehand. Layout features an image of Wedding Peach characters. The text you added on seems a bit plain, although it is easy to read and note that your site is about the Wedding Peach manga. The layout seems coarse. Your picture is cut off and then centered onto the window and then an opaque square text box on the left. I feel that this layout needs more graphic altering, especially with the image you used, and a better placement of your textbox. The three links at the bottom of your entire layout could be put inside your textbox to make this particular layout fit on a 1024x786 browser. Later on the menu also became a problem. If a visitor decided to dive deep into, say, your information section, they would have to keep pressing Back a few times until the reached your main page again, which is rather troublesome. I would suggest adding a navigation/menu directly on your layout instead of just on the main page.

Main
Interesting placement of your disclaimer. I did enjoy your introduction of your site, making it clear that this site is based only on the manga version. Add in a space between Ai and Tenshi in your introduction. The big Spoiler image throws me off. If you have spoilers for certain pages, try putting them right before that specific page and not on your main page. In what order is your menu presented in? It all seems randomly put into a list i.e. your guestbook is in the middle of your menu, where it is usually put last so that visitors can comment on your site AFTER they have viewed your entire site.

Updates
Good job in this section. Everything is organized, and it's easy to see what pages you worked on etc.

Story
I enjoyed reading your introduction to Wedding Peach. The links to each of the profiles was a nifty idea; great job on this section.

Character Profiles
You did a very nice job with all your profile pages. The images were a nice eye candy addition. It would be great to see images of the different attacks that the Angels do. The rollover effect on the images was interesting, gives the visitor something to play with. A major dislike was the number of spelling errors. They can be easily fixed with a spell check. Overall, I am quite impressed on all the summary information with links to other pages/information. I have added below errors that I found on each of the pages.

Wedding Peach/Hanasaki Momoko - Does she not have the other Human information as the other angels? I.e. Blood Type, Best Subjects, Worst Subjects, and Birthday. Spelled "believe" and "actually" in the last paragraph.

Angel Daisy/Tamano Hinagiku- In the first paragraph under First Appearance "she is one of Momoko's closest friends and she also very close to Yuri... dispite" change to "she IS also very close" and spelled "despite" wrong. Spelled "obvious" wrong in the 2nd to last paragraph.

Angel Lily/Tamina Yuri - Fix the B and iology to be on one line in the Human Bio. Spelled "earrings" wrong in Saint Something Four Item. Spelled "favorite", "dissect", "argument" wrong in the first paragraph. Change "Her" to "She" in the last sentence of the first paragraph. Spelled "consciousness" wrong in the third paragraph.

Sir Limone/Yanigiba Kazuya - In the second paragraph, first sentence, change the comma to a semicolon after "compact". In the last paragraph change "who's" to "whose".

Goddess Aphrodite - Add a semicolon after "attacks out" in the last paragraph.

Lady Cerezo/Hanasaki Sakura - Spelled "Appearance" wrong in both titles. Spelled "Continuity" wrong before Tankoban #4. First sentence in the second paragraph is a fragment. Spelled "weeping" wrong. In the last paragraph, spelled "existence" and "imbrued" wrong.

Pluie - no errors.

Reine Devila - Spelled "despises" and "hatred" wrong in the first paragraph. "Back story" is two words.

Ignis - Remember to bold and center the word "Bio".

Potamos/Kawanami Hiromi - Spelled "sickening" wrong in the first paragraph. Spelled "enrolls, centered" wrong the second paragraph. Spelled "interested" wrong in the third paragraph. Spelled "obession" wrong in the last paragraph.

Uragano - no errors.

Viento/Fuma Yosuki - Spelled "association" wrong in the first paragraph.

Tornade - no errors.

Nocturne - Spelled "forehead" wrong in the second paragraph.

Rampo - no errors.

Dali - Spelled "possesses", "apologized", "realizing" wrong.

Chispa - Spelled "retrieve" wrong.

Altheon - "However when...." sentence is a fragment. Spelled "realized", "transform", "destroy" wrong.

Jama-p - Spelled "retrieve" wrong in first paragraph. Spelled "defense" wrong in third paragraph. Spelled "sentences" wrong in last paragraph.

Blackie - Spelled "embarassed" wrong.

Pumpie - no errors

Other Jama Devils - Spelled "possesses" wrong in first paragraph. Spelled "realized" and "possessed" wrong in second paragraph. Spelled "suceeds" wrong in third paragraph. Under the second Unknowns: etc. is one word not an acronym e.t.c., it stands fully as etectera, change that to etc. Delete extra "the" in the last sentence of the first paragraph. Change "body's" to "bodies" you're indicating more than one person/singlar. Body's is singular/ Bodies is plural. The last Jama: Spelled "tie", "phases", and "identities" wrong.

Amano Takuro - first paragraph, is that suppose to be "Gloomy Pale-Faced Weaklings"? Spelled "possess" wrong in second paragraph. Spelled "abilities", "realize" wrong in third paragraph. Spelled "bracelet", "doesn't" wrong in fourth.

Hanasaki Shoichiro - after photographer in both paragraphs use a semicolon not a comma.

The Tamano Family - no errors.

The Tanima Family - Spelled "sculptors" wrong.

Mrs. Fuma - no errors.

Dean Butler - Spelled "interest" wrong in the the caption of Scarlett O'Hara. Spelled "realizes" wrong in second paragraph.

Item Profiles
Really superb job on this section as well. Anyone can see the hard work you put into finding the images to use for each of the items as well as the in depth summaries.

Saint Something Four - Spelled "occurred" wrong in the second paragraph. The Saint Something Old | Wedding Peach: Get rid of the extra "the" in the second paragraph. I absolutely enjoyed this section thoroughly. Great job on the in-depth summaries and origins of each of the items. The images were great quality too and show the visitor exactly what the item looks like in normal form as well as weapon form.

Other Angel Items - The Saint Miroir: spelled "further" wrong. I'm happy to see that you indicate "miroir" is French for mirror. The Sacred Camera: spelled "dispel", "possessed", "whether" wrong. "Wedding Peach Cut" Sword: spelled "absorb" wrong. The Saint Lipliner: spelled "tie", "enemies" wrong.

The Devils' Bracelets & Other Items - Uragano & Viento's Bracelets: spelled "recognizes" wrong.

Image Gallery
Nice selection of images. Would be great to see more images in the future i.e. galleries of each character. Commendable job on scanning in all these images, most visitors don't understand all the hard work it takes scanning in and editing images.

FAQ & Contact Me
These are good question that you have set up. Even if no one has ever asked you these questions, yes, these are some of the basics that are asked. Well done. And just a random question? Why did you name your site Paper Flowers? That can go in your FAQs =)

My Wedding Peach Fanlists
Did not review.

Essays on Wedding Peach
Aitenshi Wedding Peach & Bishojo Sailor Moon - The Similarities and Differences - There have been quite a few debates have there? I myself watched one episode of Wedding Peach and thought it was a total rip-off of Sailormoon. I'm very pleased to see that you wrote on essay on this subject. Fantastic job on the similarities and differences as well as your own arguments with supported facts.

Links In & Out
Another great section. I enjoyed the captions under the Links Out, tells the visitor exactly what the site is about. Very nice selection of Link Me banners.

Overall
This is definitely a great and wonderful source for anyone who's a fan of Wedding Peach or someone looking for a new manga to read; awesome job on the profiles, image scans, and especially the essay. It's clear that you spent a lot of time writing all this information out, researching behind the name meanings etc. A great way to check spelling errors, since there were quite a few, would be a simple spell check. Your layout also does not mirror the quality of your information; I hope that you continue to step up on layout making to reach the same quality as your extensive information.

Paper Flower's Reply to this Review
Thanks for the review it’s been very helpful! I’m going to redesign the layout, I’ve been wanting too for a while actually but your review has really given me the push to do it. I’ll also take in all your other advice – especially the navigation menu advice ^_^ I really should have one of those! Anyway as I said thank you, and I will try my best to rectify all the problems (but it may be a while before I can do this – what with “real life” obligations and all).

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