review 007

Splash
Your splash page gives a great first impression of a very dark senshi (she's chocking Sailormoon) how much more evil could we get? The note you put up about not being anti-Sailormoon is a good addition since a visitor's first impression is rather dark. Remember to capitalize "sailor" Moon. Also remember to leave a space in between Sailor and Anubis. I recall all of your spellings of her name you don't put a space (is that on purpose)? But, on the banner on your splash page there is a space in between the two words. Although it seems that you're planning to resemble the original name of Sailormoon...then state it like how it is done for Sailormoon's name << lowercased moon i.e. Sailoranubis. In your disclaimer, it states that this site is called Sanitarium? Change it to Psychosis. Remember to capitalize all the "Sailor Moon" words (and get rid of all the spaces), capitalize "All" in all rights reserved, and add a period "." at the end.

Layout
A simple layout that gets the point across; and another dark and psychotic image of Sailor Anubis. You might want to extend the menu if possible so that the menu text doesn't word wrap i.e. Frequently Asked Queries will be on one line instead of two. The word wrap makes it seem like Queries and Frequently Asked are separate pages. Add back the "!" in About Anubis if you plan to use it on all your submenu titles. "Missing Link" and "s" are separately linked to the same page...is there a reason for this?

About Anubis
Inside and out - A basic introduction/stats of Sailor Anubis. I liked the layout of your stats and the basic information given, very thorough. The image was also a nice touch. Remember to capitalize words after "?" especially in that first introduction paragraph. Spelled "many" wrong (Well, in so may words: You’re screwed.") There are also problems with using the quote symbol. If Sailor Anubis is talking the entire time her words should be in quotes and not be in separate paragraphs, and spelled "dying" wrong in Ambition.

Tricks up my sleeve - leads to a different page called "power." That title change is rather misleading to visitors. You also include her forms and weapons in here; your title of this page does not do justice. Images are always a nice addition to any site, especially an otaku senshi. If you ever find the time to draw out her attacks it would be a very great asset to this page. I'm not exactly sure why this entire page is centered? Text is made to be read either left > right or right > left...the centering of text somewhat distorts your page, especially the uniformity. If you want to accent words i.e. super or shirt use double quotes not single quotes (unless it’s already in a quote). In "Anubis Judgement, Resurrect!" use a semicolon (;) instead of the comma after snap (She closes her eyes then re-opens them with a snap, they are completely black, void of any colour what-so-ever.) In "Embalming" the last sentence is a fragment; also add an apostrophe in "victim's." In "Eulogy" last sentence an ellipsis uses three periods not two "...". In "River Styx" in the middle of the paragraph there's a one word sentence "Spirits." is it suppose to be there?

Playmates! - In the last sentence of paragraph two use a semicolon after friend. Are there any pictures of DuckDuck or Sickle?

How I came to be - I can't really review this page, it's basically full of your own commentary and grammar is out the window.

Frequently Asked Queries - Good FAQ section. Capitalize "scream" in the first sentence.

Stories and Arts!
Bedtime Stories - I did not read any of these fan fictions since everyone is titled to their own opinion on how much they like a story...as well as it's the author's responsibility to find a beta (second reader to look over mistakes or give suggestions). But, I can see how developed your character is with all the types of stories you have to offer on this page.

Recommended Reading - A good section that features your favorite fan fictions. Nicely done. Might want to include the Author's name after the title, even if they are directly linked. In "One Moment Longer" Neo Queen Serenity has spaces between her name unlike the senshi. And again with the single quotes...double quote them.

Pretty Drawings - A nicely laid out fan art section. Fan art is always eye candy. Only comment I have is to have them open up in new windows so visitors won't be deviated from your site.

Play With Me!
Art or Atrocity? You decide - This is rather an interesting section on how otaku senshi aren't always original. Spelled "During" wrong, add back an apostrophe in "Ive" and capitalize "Sailormoon" in the first paragraph.

Forum - Did not review.

Vote - It's a great way to get feedback for your site.

Guestbook - Did not review.

Contact - Spelled "routine" wrong. Are Eveln Lacryment, Studeio Splurd, AnarchicQ Designs all suppose to lead to http://q.splurd.com? Or are they different sites? Again just a suggestion on having other site links open up in new windows so visitors can still visit your site while browsing your out links.

Extra!
Stuff I won - Good layout of your award section. Tells exactly when you won them and from who. Well done.

Missing Links - I suppose the title to this page is suppose to be original, but at the same time it is also misleading with the word "missing." You have a great selection of fanart/fic/otaku sites as well as a variety of buttons for other sites to link you with, nicely done.

Rings - The first image in Rings is broken.

Past Updates - It’s nice to see that you are constantly updating your site. The layout of your updates is well done.

Overall
A well done otaku senshi should always be praised. Sailor Anubis is no exception. It's rare to find sites that are willing to dedicate a senshi to the evil side. There were a few problems with grammar, and comments I made on one page should be considered and checked over in all your pages. I wish you well with your otaku senshi.

Psychosis' Reply to this Review
Thank you for your review of Psychosis. It was very thorough and caught things that slipped past me (Such as the Missing link and s being seperate links leading to the same place.)

I don't know your screen resolution, but on mine, the FAQ is one line. I agree that I've much little tweaking to do, thank you again. I shall get to it eventually.

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